Description: I am writing to entertain. I chose to write about camp. "So he snots on me and Jack and he spits at Shaun..." Read more to find out what happens....
Next activity at school camp is kayaking. Yay, I run to the kayak. I jump in the kayak. I get pushed into the water. Moldy stuff comes in my kayak. It is slimy . I never knew I could kayak. We are playing a game. We throw the ball. You get a point... 3 2 1 GO! Jack throws the ball. I kayak over to it. I was going too fast so I went past it. So I jumped in the slimy water and I get a point, sadly it is time to go now.
The last activity is horse riding yay. Oh I stood in horse poo. I can wash it off later. "Cohen it is your turn" said Maryanne, yay.
"Can I have Fin?" Yep, cool It is a bumpy ride and he stops for a drink. 10 mins later he is done, Time to hop off and you can feed Pepa. Pepa is my favourite horse. So I went into his paddock and I patted him. Then me Jack and Shaun went in Pepa's paddock. If he snots on you he likes you and when he spits at you he hates you. So he snots on me and Jack and he spits at Shaun. Then it was time to go back on the bus, where I had a little nap on the way back to school.
Feedback I think next time when we write a story you should get some people or adults to help you spell the words. from Shaun ;}
Feedforword I like how you explained what activity you are doing. from Shaun
description:first we had to chose a word my one was freindship and then Elly had to take a photo of us i got my photo taken by the bushes and when it was finshed it was to small so i put it on some paper and then it fit and it was all done i am glad that i did my one word i hope we do this again sometime soon.
feedfword i think that next time when you have a photo about a word you could put your hands a bit closer.
feedback i really like the smile on your face and you are being pashinnit in your photo
the d was hard because I fogot to put it in so I mad it so the snack is cling up the tree